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From ice water's nest ascends the strawhat,
Pumping pastle-esque glitz upon dead dust,
Exhaling fresh breeze which songbirds caw at,
Thus summons the citric zest of summer.

Grass blades glimmer in war against warm wind,
Waves shampoo deep desert dunes of cool flames,
As rays of light ignite man's heart and skin
Nostalgia joy floods life's conscious veins.

Straw unbinds as depths engulf lime colour,
Nature drowns in neutralised winter's touch,
Streams of silver transform darkness' smother,
Human's bed love in pale light isn't much.

Earth decays and slumbers in icy moon,
But summer sun breathes life for next day soon.
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I haven't written a sonnet in a looong time, so I figured it was about time I wrote one. Since we're in the depth of summer, I thought it would be a good topic to focus on.

At the suggestion of Polyrhythm, I ended up going into a nearby cafe and decided to write whatever came onto my mind. I knew I wanted a sonnet, but I wasn't aware of what would come out until I observed the bright morning light seeping through the windows. Summer morning. So I applied a lot light imagery within this poem and how the summer sun breathes life into the living, around it, reanimating the 'dead'. The first stanza focuses particularly on the rise of the sun in the morning and how it is personified into a being which gives life.

It took me a while to write. It set me back three hours or so, for something so little. Every word too a while to consider, since I was also after a lot of fluid consonance/alliteration, which I think I achieved. I also had to get the Iambic Pentametre right, too, so that each line had five beats. This caused me to rephrase several lines in order to get it to that correct length, whilst still maintaining ten syllables on each line. The rhyming pattern stands as A, B, A, B... C, D, C, D... E, F, E, F... G, G.

As with all Shakespearean sonnets, the third quatrain is an antithesis of the previous two stanzas, focusing more on the fall of the sun and the light of the evening, showing how the world is smothered with 'death'.

Anyhow, I intended this to be more upbeat than anything else, so I hope you enjoy it!
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~ErisNik Jul 31, 2009  Professional Digital Artist
That was quite lovely, Smazzy. ^^


Although, I gotta admit, I think iambic pentametre is the most confusing shit I've ever heard about. We kinda touched into that in english class... I think.

I can't even spell it, let alone pronounce it. xD
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~Smaz Aug 1, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
Thankee. =D

Iambic is all about the beats of a line and the emphasis on the words. It's difficult to get the iambic beat right, as well as the syllables of the line, too. Pentametre is 5 beats per line, but you can get things like Sestametre (6 beats) and other ones, too. I think it may be spelt Pentameter in American English, though (since you tend to switch the r's and e's around at the end of the words).
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~ErisNik Aug 1, 2009  Professional Digital Artist
:3

... I think I sorta get it. x3 I just think it sounds pretty.
Oh, and, I think so, yeah. I was just unsure of that. xD Although I still remember mispronouncing it badly during English, which was somewhat embarrassing.
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~Kassyaa Jul 31, 2009  Hobbyist General Artist
Hmm, that is so beautiful
You have an excellent usage of English.
It's so good when something just pops into your head and you're able to express in in the way you know best.
Very nice :+favlove:
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~Smaz Jul 31, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks very much, Plasma! ://D
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~Kassyaa Jul 31, 2009  Hobbyist General Artist
You're very welcome. : D
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